Haiku, Micropoetry, Poetry, Poetry Comparisons, Tanka, Writing

Crimson Gate (Version 1 and 2)

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For today, I have two slightly different versions of the same poem! The first version is a haiku, while the second is a tanka poem. As such, they are of differing length, and phrases/words have been added and rearranged in each poem. However, I wrote both based on the same theme and ideas. I hope you enjoy them!

Version 1/ Haiku

Pray at sacred shrine

Crimson gate towers above

Cross over again

© 17 May 2020, by Haley Scully

Version 2/ Tanka

Summer cicadas

Screech, their shrill melody drifts

Crimson gate appears

In the aqua sky, kneel down

And pray at the sacred shrine

© 17 May 2020, by Haley Scully

This is the first time I’ve posted a poem comparison, so I’d love to hear any feedback you might have! Which poem did you like better, and why? I’d really like to hear your thoughts on this! Feel free to leave a comment below and let me know!

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